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Two installments in one week? Excellent!
So I'm just going to point out some lines I really enjoyed this time:
“There are lines,” Michael insisted. He didn’t know where this was coming from and, worst of all, knew without Beth needing to say anything that it would not last, that it was just a phantom pain from a limb long gone, and yet he could not stop himself. He remembered the way that David’s mouth had felt on his and the way that David had talked to him all evening, like he was ignoring who and what Michael actually was through force of will, and like Michael was something better than they both knew he actually was.
I like this almost fatalistic view of the loss of his conscience...like he might have been able to get it back he has done too much. And yet, with David, it was possible to believe for a little while that he was something worthwhile.
Michael did jerk his arm away from her, then. “Get your own life together before you start giving me advice on mine, Beth.”
Her teeth glittered at him. “And I’m not the functioning alcoholic on the verge of a nervous breakdown, now, am I? I’ll give you tonight. Have something for me by tomorrow morning, or we’re going to have a problem.” Beth turned back towards her office. A single raised eyebrow got the entire newsroom back to working.
Beth is something fierce. It's very easy to imagine her because her voice is so consistent. In this chapter, you revealed she's a little more complex than just a cold-hearted bitch, but she's also where Michael could end up if he just gives up.
It was Michael’s first real laugh of the day. It hurt his ribs, but it felt good, too. He wondered what David would do if he were to learn that he was the keeper of so many of Michael’s better moments. “Stalker.”
He's spent such a short amount of time with David and yet he feels that. That he just makes people feel better, made Michael feel human for a little.
Michael stayed for several long moments with his face pressed against the rough brick wall, all the while thinking that he had not undergone nearly as many changes since he had dicked over his band as he liked to pretend.
Was that the catalyst? What did he do with the band? Love this teasing of the past and hello, I'm with Beth on the Hyde thing. What were the police doing there?
You're doing an amazing job. Yay! Do you have anymore Michael/David stories planned (I am greedy I know)?
So I'm just going to point out some lines I really enjoyed this time:
“There are lines,” Michael insisted. He didn’t know where this was coming from and, worst of all, knew without Beth needing to say anything that it would not last, that it was just a phantom pain from a limb long gone, and yet he could not stop himself. He remembered the way that David’s mouth had felt on his and the way that David had talked to him all evening, like he was ignoring who and what Michael actually was through force of will, and like Michael was something better than they both knew he actually was.
I like this almost fatalistic view of the loss of his conscience...like he might have been able to get it back he has done too much. And yet, with David, it was possible to believe for a little while that he was something worthwhile.
Michael did jerk his arm away from her, then. “Get your own life together before you start giving me advice on mine, Beth.”
Her teeth glittered at him. “And I’m not the functioning alcoholic on the verge of a nervous breakdown, now, am I? I’ll give you tonight. Have something for me by tomorrow morning, or we’re going to have a problem.” Beth turned back towards her office. A single raised eyebrow got the entire newsroom back to working.
Beth is something fierce. It's very easy to imagine her because her voice is so consistent. In this chapter, you revealed she's a little more complex than just a cold-hearted bitch, but she's also where Michael could end up if he just gives up.
It was Michael’s first real laugh of the day. It hurt his ribs, but it felt good, too. He wondered what David would do if he were to learn that he was the keeper of so many of Michael’s better moments. “Stalker.”
He's spent such a short amount of time with David and yet he feels that. That he just makes people feel better, made Michael feel human for a little.
Michael stayed for several long moments with his face pressed against the rough brick wall, all the while thinking that he had not undergone nearly as many changes since he had dicked over his band as he liked to pretend.
Was that the catalyst? What did he do with the band? Love this teasing of the past and hello, I'm with Beth on the Hyde thing. What were the police doing there?
You're doing an amazing job. Yay! Do you have anymore Michael/David stories planned (I am greedy I know)?